tony

One word: Wow.

Main point to me:
-Your experience with anorexia and your development as a writer are inextricably linked. Your growth as a writer is reflected in your coming to terms with an illness.

Solid:
-Your intricate weaving of two storylines: the battle with anorexia and your development as a writer. Jessica, you did such an amazing job going back and forth between these two. The balance of attention you give them is startling and DEFT. It takes a very skilled hand like yours not to get lost in the narrative of the illness but to be able to constantly bring the reader back to the significance as to your experience with language. I’m absolutely stunned at your ability to achieve that total integration.
-Your intricate weaving of two storylines. I needed to say that again. Wow.
-Your sentence variety. For example, on page 2, I numbered some of your sentences. I want to make you aware of how this works in a reader’s mind. Bear with me. With #1, you have ...